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  Sarah O’Neill, Coatesville, Supreme Editing Princeton Excerpt For each class, Princeton brings together a varied mix of high-achieving, intellectually gifted students from diverse backgrounds to create an exceptional learning community. According to Princeton admissions  ( via their website ): “We look for students with intellectual curiosity who have pursued and achieved academic excellence. We also look for students with strong personal and extracurricular accomplishments.” “This is your opportunity to display your best writing as well as your ability to convey ideas in your own voice.” Instead of worrying about meeting a specific set of criteria, try to create an application that will help us see your achievements — inside the classroom and out — in their true context, so we can understand your potential to take advantage of the resources at Princeton and the kind of contribution you would make to the Princeton community. Show us what kind of student you are. Show us that...

  By Sarah O'Neill, Coatesville, PA, Supreme Editing UPenn Excerpt “We’re interested in learning all about you: what you love, your strengths, your challenges, your interests, and how these pieces come together to make you a distinct individual who will actively grow and contribute to the Penn community. We read your words carefully, as they are yet another window into how you think, what you value, and how you see the world. Through your writing, we get a glimpse of what you might bring to our community, including your voice and creativity.” Penn encourages students to reflect on themselves, their community, and their interests. Your voice matters. They want their campus to reflect the world around them, so they enroll students who come from all corners of the world and a wide range of backgrounds. According to UPenn admissions ( via their website ): “Penn wants to learn about what you love, your strengths, your challenges, your interests, and how these pieces come together to ma...

  Sarah O’Neill, Supreme Editing, Coatesville The walls dripped with the sweat of an early September sun as I reached the cafeteria, where I squeezed in with the usual gaggle of students for sloppy Joes. My stomach growling, I formed a line near the entrance among wide-eyed freshmen, stifled sophomores, and weary juniors (me). Then, by some magnetic force, the seniors were compelled to the front of the line, brushing us aside. There must’ve been something in the air that day — maybe the faint scent of tomato, or perhaps the exhaustion of analyzing the rhetoric in  1984  for an hour right before — but I found myself shifting forward, trying to block their intrusion. That was the first time I had ever publicly stood up and broke the norm at my school. Growing up in a Chinese household, my childhood was steeped with tradition. From the  tangzhuang  my brother and I wore to New Year’s, to the  hong bao  (red envelopes stuffed with money) that we received f...

By Sarah O'Neill, Coatesville, Supreme Editing Brandeis University Excerpt: According to Brandeis University admissions ( via the website ):   “ We balance attention to detail with a focus on the big picture.”   We’ll consider both your academic performance and your life outside the classroom.  We want to get a true feel for who you are- what matters to you, how you spend your time, and how you engage with your family, team, workplace, or spiritual communities.    They’re committed to a mindset of growth and discovery - both of self and of the kind of knowledge that moves society forward.  Brandeis University prides itself on its global network of alumni , engaged for a lifetime, who provide support to the community. Their mission is to engage, connect, and benefit alumni and students to strengthen Brandeis while honoring its founding principles.  READ- What We Look For Brandeis is a university dedicated to our founding values of inclusivi...

  MIT Excerpt By Sarah O'Neill, Supreme Editing, Coatesville “Be honest, be open, be authentic—this is your opportunity to connect with us.” “You should certainly be thoughtful about your essays, but if you’re thinking too much—spending a lot of time stressing or strategizing about what makes you “look best,” as opposed to the answers that are honest and easy—you’re doing it wrong.” MIT is looking for a connection between you + MIT, primarily. An MIT student is: a risk-taker, hands-on, and optimistic towards others. Most essays are varied in topic - dismissing the notion that MIT only looks for one type of person or one activity.  According to MIT admissions ( via their website ): Personal essay:   Although we can’t give you an opinion of what your chances are, we can give you a sense of what we look when selecting students for admission. Basically, we’re looking for students with broad interests, both academic and non-academic , who have taken a rigorous academic curric...

  NYU Stern Excerpt by Sarah O'Neill, Coatesville, Supreme Editing According to NYU Stern admissions (via their website ): New York University’s mission is to be a top-quality international scholarship, teaching, and research center. NYU seeks to take academic and cultural advantage of its location and embrace diversity among faculty, staff, and students to ensure a wide range of perspectives, including international ones, in the educational experience .   Values - Stern Business School is bold, nimble, fearless, hip, edgy, and innovative- rooted in rigor yet on the cutting edge.   An intelligent, street-smart community that reveres diversity, inclusion, equity, and belonging of all people and ideas. They have an unequivocal belief that the power of business to improve society is built directly into our culture and curriculum.  With their NYC location and access to NYU’s global network, we build deep connections with industry worldwide that yield both experient...

  Emory Excerpt by Sarah O'Neill, Coatesville, Supreme Editing Emory relies heavily on the same factors as most universities, but there are some special highlights. Be sure to take note of them! This sentiment is repeated often: be engaged in the world around them - at school and beyond.  According to Emory admissions (via their website) : “This essay is all about honesty . Being honest about their background, honest about their relationship with friends, and honest about their own feelings toward their community. The essay shows growth and reflection. While the simple topic of the essay is essentially not attending a high school dance, it is about so much more. The writing style is straightforward and simple—in a good way—and it is an edited and polished piece. The author of the essay is reflective about their community and does not try to be anything they are not. They understand that if they expect change, they themselves have to be a part of that change.” “ We hope you u...