How to Write the Emory University Admissions Essay

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by Sarah O'Neill, Coatesville, Supreme Editing

Emory relies heavily on the same factors as most universities, but there are some special highlights. Be sure to take note of them! This sentiment is repeated often: be engaged in the world around them - at school and beyond. 


According to Emory admissions (via their website) :


“This essay is all about honesty. Being honest about their background, honest about their relationship with friends, and honest about their own feelings toward their community. The essay shows growth and reflection. While the simple topic of the essay is essentially not attending a high school dance, it is about so much more. The writing style is straightforward and simple—in a good way—and it is an edited and polished piece. The author of the essay is reflective about their community and does not try to be anything they are not. They understand that if they expect change, they themselves have to be a part of that change.”


“We hope you use your essay to give us a compelling glimpse of the real you.”


Personal essay: This is your place to show us who you are. We’re looking for students who have a voice, who are intellectually curious, and who have demonstrated an engagement with the world around them.  MORE: Even though our students are a diverse group, they do share some characteristics. They tend to be high achievers who are engaged in their community and who are looking to make the world—in ways big and small—a better place.


In history, the types of students admitted to Emory consisted of: people who are actively engaged and immersed in their own communities or the ones they join. They either represent or become a part of it in integral ways  - in part to find individual engagement but more so to make the people around them feel more connected to something in big and small ways. 



Supplemental Essay Example:

Prompt: What academic areas are you interested in exploring in college? (200 words)

As a city girl, sailing on Dianshan Lake was my getaway from stress and immersion into nature. There I also witnessed rapid climate change. At the lake where I sail, there was a dramatic surge in seaweed growth and algae blooms due to global warming, pollution, and fertilizer runoffs. Because of this, I aspire to learn more about ecological issues, especially in Environmental Sciences. 

Initiating small steps at the local level came first. I established a platform to inform locals about the Connecticut River’s ecosystem, conservation, and shared experiences. If accepted to Emory’s Environmental Science program, courses like Research Methods For Studies of Water and Health explore water quality in the Chattahoochee River, is unique to making change. Sewage pollution threatens Atlanta waterways, and marginalized communities are burdened. Similar to the Connecticut River Flows Project I started, I believe rivers serve as the veins of a community - preserving them are vital to keeping us alive. Also, Emory’s Waterhub can recycle up to 400,000 gallons of water to satisfy 40 percent of daily use. I held water conservation workshops hoping to initiate change in our daily actions. Through Emory’s education, I can become a future solution to the climate crisis.

by Sarah O'Neill, Coatesville, Supreme Editing




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