How to Write the NYU Stern Admissions Essays

 NYU Stern Excerpt

by Sarah O'Neill, Coatesville, Supreme Editing

According to NYU Stern admissions (via their website):

New York University’s mission is to be a top-quality international scholarship, teaching, and research center. NYU seeks to take academic and cultural advantage of its location and embrace diversity among faculty, staff, and students to ensure a wide range of perspectives, including international ones, in the educational experience.  


Values- Stern Business School is bold, nimble, fearless, hip, edgy, and innovative- rooted in rigor yet on the cutting edge.  An intelligent, street-smart community that reveres diversity, inclusion, equity, and belonging of all people and ideas. They have an unequivocal belief that the power of business to improve society is built directly into our culture and curriculum.  With their NYC location and access to NYU’s global network, we build deep connections with industry worldwide that yield both experiential learning projects and jobs. 



In history, students who made direct references to what NYU had to offer were successful. The prompts were answered precisely and specifically.  Fresh and vivid language was used. Students showed a range of backgrounds who will contribute to diversity on campus.  Successful students were able to tell what makes them, them and how they will be a meaningful addition to the NYU student body.  Students were eager to expand their horizons, learn about different cultures and points of view, and engage with a diverse range of people.  They gave admissions insight into their values, passions, and worldview. 


Supplemental Essay Example:

Prompt:Choose one quote from the following and let us know why it inspires you; or share a short quote and person not on our list who inspires you, and include why. (250 words) “We’re used to people telling us there are no solutions, and then creating our own. So we did what we do best. We reached out to each other, and to our allies, and we mobilized across communities to make change, to benefit and include everyone in society.” 

  • Judith Heuman, 2022 NYU Commencement Address


I burn with rebellion in the best way possible. When I’m told I can’t, I know I can. In Judith Heuman’s quote about creating our own solutions with help from our allies, it hit close to home. As an artist myself, I feel there are too many under-resourced artists. To achieve the success they envision for themselves, they face unrealistic expectations.  I understood the scale of impact needed to create transformative change. 

Even though I had envisioned raising greater awareness for quality fine arts education globally, I felt ill-equipped as small corporations overlooked me as a teenager with few valuable connections to benefit them, and why the quote speaks to me. It is a big feat to mobilize communities to empower artists, boost confidence, and fight ageism - but, I was up for the challenge. Speaking with Johnson & Johnson employees, my team applied for the J&J donation back program. We were finally accepted, building a bridge to connect local artists, our mission, and corporate sponsors. Securing support crucial to crossing cultural divides, we marketed our mission to changemakers across the US. With 9 chapters, we couldn’t stop there. 

After fundraisers in the US, we were able to gather enough funds to rebuild an outdoor arts studio in the rural Tomas de Berlanga school in Ecuador. The kids’ beaming smiles in videos was enough to motivate us to continue expanding our efforts. The next month, we raised enough money to provide scholarships to extremely talented artists in Brazil and Venezuela. 



by Sarah O'Neill, Coatesville, Supreme Editing


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