How to Write the UNC Chapel Hill Essay WITH REAL SAMPLES Sarah O'Neill Supreme Editing Coatesville

 Sarah O'Neill Supreme Editing Coatesville


UNC Chapel Hill Excerpt


TIP:  “We’re working to build a talented and inclusive community at Carolina, and we hope you’ll take this opportunity to share how you’d contribute to that community.”



According to UNC admissions (via their website):

“Your personal essay and short answers give us the chance to hear your voice and see you as a whole person, not just a student. When you respond, we hope you’ll be yourself and sound like yourself.” UNC believes that students can only achieve their best when they learn alongside students from different backgrounds. Your essays should reveal what being a part of the Carolina community would mean to you. Focus on how your unique contributions to Carolina, your skills and perspectives, will become part of an “undeniable energy you’ll feel wherever you go.” Show how your perspectives and experiences make YOU a Tar Heel. Show how you have pushed your intellectual and inquisitive boundaries and how you have pursued your interests and absorbed life outside the classroom. Your responses should reveal how you participate in your community and feed your curiosities: Show that you ask how things work and how you explore the world around you.


In history, the types of students admitted consisted of: applicants who can express what they have learned about being a part of a broader community. They express ways they have been vulnerable within an intellectual context and how they aspired to achieve through peer competition, debate, and mutually beneficial discussion. Admitted students express that they do not necessarily have all the answers, but that they know how to ask the right questions: they are strong thinkers. They show these realizations through moving and meaningful stories. They show how the story taught them something important. 


Supplemental Essay Example:

Prompt: Discuss an academic topic that you’re excited to explore and learn more about in college. Why does this topic interest you? Topics could be a specific course of study, research interests, or any other area related to your academic experience in college. (250 words)


Like people, computers are hardwired and soft-wired. I intend to design and make computer systems or, on a larger scale, robots that may one day be an asset to society. With today’s advances in Machine Learning and Artificial Intelligence algorithms, I want to combine high-tech hardware like sophisticated robots with the new algorithms of Artificial Intelligence to solve problems that might have been challenging before, such as improving autonomous vehicles so that driving can be easier and safer. Areas like autonomous vehicles would be impossible without our Machine Learning and Artificial Intelligence technologies breakthrough. 

During the summer of 2022,  I conducted a research where I utilized three different Machine Learning models to analyze the hardware data from more than 200 computer CPU models on the market today. Surprisingly, the Machine Learning models successfully produced accurate predictions of the CPU performance when later given some testing hardware data as input. With this personal experience that reaffirmed my notion about the power of AI and Machine Learning, at the University of North Carolina, I want to explore the software side of Machine Learning algorithms combined with the hardware components of computers and robots. Specifically, courses like Programming Intelligent Physical Systems at University of North Carolina will help me gain an understanding of both the software and hardware aspects of computer and engineering. With that knowledge in mind, I could explore the countless possibilities of applying Machine Learning to machine hardware to solve “impossible” challenges. 


  1. Discuss one of your personal qualities and share a story, anecdote, or memory of how it helped you make a positive impact on a community. This could be your current community or another community you have engaged.  (250 words)

 

I am so glad I am resilient, especially when I was trapped by Imposter Syndrome. As the programming guy on the robotics team, I watched my teammates piece parts together naturally as if a detailed blueprint existed. Although I’d dreamt of building along with them, I couldn’t gather enough confidence in myself to put my hands on the robot.  This changed when our team struggled to build a forklift for our competition robot to lift a heavy game object. The building stopped for days, but the competition was in two weeks. 

One night, when I walked past the lab, I saw the moonlight reflecting off the incomplete body of our robot; I decided to keep faith in our robot, and keep faith in myself. I went with my guts and, to my surprise, I found an innovative way to use four sprockets to achieve a super high gear ratio to give the motor enough torque to lift the weight. I finally understood that all the effort I spent observing my teammates and the late nights watching online tutorials: they weren’t for nothing. 

The following day, my teammates stood around the robot, amazed. I had overcome the challenge and broke free of the Imposter Syndrome. Two weeks later, our robot lifted the object during competition, and ranked 16th out of more than 50 teams. Although we didn’t make it into the finals, I still felt like I won: my resilience won out over my will to give up. 


  1. Discuss an academic topic that you’re excited to explore and learn more about in college. Why does this topic interest you? Topics could be a specific course of study, research interests, or any other area related to your academic experience in college. (250 words)


Like people, computers are hardwired and soft-wired. I intend to design and make computer systems or, on a larger scale, robots that may one day be an asset to society. With today’s advances in Machine Learning and Artificial Intelligence algorithms, I want to combine high-tech hardware like sophisticated robots with the new algorithms of Artificial Intelligence to solve problems that might have been challenging before, such as improving autonomous vehicles so that driving can be easier and safer. Areas like autonomous vehicles would be impossible without our Machine Learning and Artificial Intelligence technologies breakthrough. 

During the summer of 2022,  I conducted a research where I utilized three different Machine Learning models to analyze the hardware data from more than 200 computer CPU models on the market today. Surprisingly, the Machine Learning models successfully produced accurate predictions of the CPU performance when later given some testing hardware data as input. With this personal experience that reaffirmed my notion about the power of AI and Machine Learning, at the University of North Carolina, I want to explore the software side of Machine Learning algorithms combined with the hardware components of computers and robots. Specifically, courses like Programming Intelligent Physical Systems at University of North Carolina will help me gain an understanding of both the software and hardware aspects of computer and engineering. With that knowledge in mind, I could explore the countless possibilities of applying Machine Learning to machine hardware to solve “impossible” challenges. 

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